Gas line break
By Gabriel Gabriel
San Francisco Chronicle
SAN FRANCISICO – Traffic is at a standstill. It's really snarled. The police have cordoned off all the surrounding streets, effectively shutting down a four-block area near Folsom and 11th Streets, the South of Market area, where a high-pressure gas pipe had been accidentally ruptured.
A PG&E person says that a private construction crew was trying to repair sewer lines. In the process, they severed a two-inch underground gas pipe with a backhoe, he said. It happened a little before
People were standing around at the edges of the incident. Several very irate at the fact that this unfortunate accident happened because it caused at least 100 people to be forced out of the area, including neighborhood residents, dozens of business owners and their customers.
Carlann Lauria, manager of Crocker's Lockers says, "Ask my customers. They were pretty irate." Crocker's Lockers is a self-storage company on Folsom near
Samantha Feldman, manager of Wa-Ha-Ka restaurant says her employees and patrons were forced to leave. The restaurant is located on the corner where the construction crew had been working. Feldman said the restaurant lost about $500 dollars worth of business in the shutdown.
Thankfully, all repairs should be made and there should be business as usual a little after 5p.m., according to PG&E.
1 comment:
Remember that this is news writing, so people will be reading it after the fact. That means it should be past tense. Save the present tense for broadcast writing.
Get to the news in your lead! This is all over the place. I want to know what happened: A gas-line break shut down a four-block area South of Market, snarling traffic and forcing an evacuation.
Once you've told me that, you can get into how and why it happened, and details of its impact.
Too much of this reads like it's pasted straight from the fact sheet. Make it read like a story.
7/10
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