Tourists robbed at gunpoint in Saint Mary’s Cathedral parking lot.
WeiMing Chen, 28, and his wife, Li Lu, 30 had been with their tour group that morning. They left the group at about
A man approached them. After he approached them, the thief waved a pistol around. Then he demanded their money. Chen handed over his money, about $100. However, the thief wanted more. Chen gave him his Visa card. He also gave him their passports, camera and airline tickets.
Chen described the assailant as being about 18 years old. The victims later said he was wearing a black jacket and cap.
According to Sgt. Lawrence Price of the
Nobody knows if the couple was able to make their
1 comment:
Your first sentence has the right info, but it sounds like a headline not a lead. Here's a lead:
Two Taiwanese tourists were robbed at gunpoint yesterday morning in the Saint Mary’s Cathedral parking lot.
Tighten it up! Cut unnecessary words and combine short sentences. For example: WeiMing Chen, 28, and his wife, Li Lu, 30, left their tour group at about 10 a.m. to take photos in cathedral's lower parking lot. That's when a man approached them, waving a pistol and demanding their money, said Sgt. Lawrence Price of the San Francisco Police Department.
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