Broadcast Style Exercise
NORTHWEST AIRLINES ANOUNCED TODAY THAT IT IS CUTTING IT’S DOMESTIC FARES BY UP TO 40% FOR
"WE LIKE TO THINK OF IT AS A
TICKETS MUST BE PURCHASED BY FRIDAY FOR TRAVEL BETWEEN NOV. 12 AND JAN. 14 IN THE LOWER 48 STATES,
WITH THE DISCOUNTED, NON-REFUNDABLE FAIRES, A PASSENGER COULD TRAVEL ROUND-TRIP BETWEEN
DISCOUNTS VARY DEPENDING ON TRAVEL DATES AND ARE NOT AVAILABLE ON CERTAIN POPULAR DAYS, INCLUDING NOV. 23, NOV. 26, DEC. 23 AND DEC. 26.
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1 comment:
P1: ITS (not IT'S) and 40-PERCENT (-2)
P2: C-E-O; look up the rules on using quotes in broadcast. You've broken them here. (-3)
P3: Spell out the months -- you don't want the announcer to say "NOV." (-2)
P4: FARES (not FAIRES), 500-DOLLARS, months (-4)
4/15
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